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Some people believe that using a bicycle as a main form of transportation has a lot of advantages whereas others think it has many disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Bicycle
Suggestion
The bicycle
 is
one
 of the basic sources of transportation for centuries. A
lot
 of people still using
bicycle
Suggestion
bicycles
 as a way of transportation. Few people argue that there will be a
lot
 of advantages by using
bicycle
Suggestion
the bicycle
bicycles
a bicycle
 as a primary way of transport where few believe that it has many disadvantages, I don't agree with that and I will explain why in
this
 easy with some examples.
Bicycle
Suggestion
The bicycle
 is a revolutionary machine that works human energy. It changed so many things. From the beginning, it has improved a
lot
 with different enhancements. The invention of the motor vehicles, greatly reduced the usage of the
bicycle
, but we are still using them for short distances. Riding
bicycle
Suggestion
a bicycle
 is a great form of exercise and it became
one
 of the popular sport as well. There are a
lot
 of advantages by using bicycles including great exercise and it is
one
 of the reasons why people do cycling regularly. It is considered as
one
 the way for recreation. People usually enjoy bike riding through parks and woods. Another primary advantage of
bicycle is
Accept comma addition
bicycle, is
 it is
ecofriendly
, there will be absolutely no pollution or damage to the environment by using it. That's why many metropolises now introducing bike stands within the city to travel. There are very few disadvantages associated with bike riding, and they are easily neglected.
One
 of them are limited
of
Suggestion
by
 distance, it works with human energy which is limited,
hence
, the distance we can travel using it
also
 limited. Not only distance, speed is
also
one
 of the main disadvantages. In the twenty
first
 century
first
 century everything is speed and
bicycle
 can't catch that due to its restrictions. These two are the main reason we were motorcycles got their prominence. To conclude, advantages of using
bicycle
 have more and the disadvantages are negligible.
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