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many animal species are becoming extinct by human activities . What are the reason and solutions to solve this issue?

#species #activities #reason
it
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It
is believe
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is believed
 that the extinction of rare animals and marine creature
is contributed
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contributes
 to human activities.
This
 phenomenon can be
causes
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caused
 by the deforestation and the illegal exploitation,
However
 there are several feasible solutions is considered to tackle
this
 problem. There are a number of reasons why human activities cause the extinction of endangered animals.
First
, Overfishing and illegal
huntting
the pursuit and killing or capture of wild animals regarded as a sport
hunting
 has an
advers
contrary to your interests or welfare
adverse
diverse
 impacts on the marine ecosystem. In fact, In order to
eploit
use or manipulate to one's advantage
exploit
 a large number of fish, many people have used chemical substances or boom to exploit.
As a result
, millions of marine
creature
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creatures
 like fishes, shrimp are killed due to toxic substances into water.
Second
, Deforestation and overpopulation
also
 are demolishing wildlife habitats.
For example
,
unstainable
 logging of timber for construction and manufacture paper have
an
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a
 serious effect on
natural environment
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the natural environment
, many species have to the face the risk of the loss of habitats to live in.
However many
Accept comma addition
However, many
 effective solutions are proposed to address
this
 status. On of the ways to deal with
this
 problem is Government should implement
trict
rigidly accurate; allowing no deviation from a standard
strict
 punishments to limit and prohibit illegal activities.
if
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If
 heavy fine or
even prison sentence
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even a prison sentence
 is implemented for devastating
behavious
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
, the rate of prisoner related to illegal hunting or illegal exploitation would reduce dramatically. In
addtion
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
, government should invest building like zoos or wildlife parks to protect rare animals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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