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With increased population communicating via internet and text message, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?

#population #internet #text #message #face #communication
I really agree with
this
 statement. Many people communicate with others around the world through the
internet
 easily.It is more and more popular. Nowadays people can send text messages and
face
 to
face
 communication by using the
internet
, so it became an
avoidable
Suggestion
avoiding
 factor in our life.Many advantages with technology. People connect to computers or smartphones via the
internet
fastly
with rapid movements
quickly
 and they can communicate with others anywhere in the world and at any time.Many software companies conduct
face
 to
face
 interviews by using the
internet
 and employees are able to work from home by using the net.
For
example I
Accept comma addition
example, I
 work as a software developer in a MNC company and I will work from home 3
day
Suggestion
days
 per a week.
On the other hand
, some people think that
this
 technology spoils the relationship between humans because they spend more time on mobile phones only and they are addicted to gadgets. So they do not talk to others directly. Sometimes people contact strangers, so they put their life in danger.
For instance
, recently I saw a news article where one girl communicated with an unknown person and he gathered personal information from her. After he started
blackmail
Suggestion
blackmailing
 to her. To conclude, the
internet
 is a very vital factor in our daily basis and many uses are there and
also
every one
all people
everyone
 should take care of using it.
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