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The benefits and drawbacks of studying at international schools. Agree or dissagree?

#schools #dissagree
It is believed that studying at international schools has a large variety of advantages
besides
 a tremendous number of disadvantages. In my option, I completely agree with
this
 view On the one hand, learning at international university has a rich diversity of benefits.
Firstly
, facilities of these schools are top- tier with a huge variety of air conditioners, computers.
Besides
, it has a huge array of room
such
 as
physical place
Suggestion
a physical place
, learning listen English area, dining place...Which severs demand children’s studying and eating.
Secondly
, children are taken care about refreshment, health by their teacher and expert doctors who is famous the most of the domestic hospitals.
For example
, foods are thoroughly controlled and cooked by expert chefs.
Finally
, curriculums of
this
 university are various with numerous extra-curricular activities, which helps students enhance practical skills and expand knowledge
On the other hand
, there are a variety of reasons why studying at international schools has some drawbacks. One the reason is that tuition fee is extremely exorbitant.
For example
, at international Japan-Vietname school, each student had to pay from 25000$ to 30000$ every year, which is five to ten times the cost of
pulic
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
 schools.
Therefore
, many parents would not provide enough money for their children to follow
learn
Suggestion
learns
 these schools.
Furthermore
, its curricular is not suitable with requiring national academic exams of ministry of education. Be
cause, t
Suggestion
concluding
hese universities only constrate on languages and practical skills rather than acad
emic su
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
bjects In conclude, I think that studying international universities has a lot of advantages
besides
 sevaral causes disadvantages
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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