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In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one’s own family. Why might people want to do this? Is it a positive or a negative development?

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The
world
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 has seen
plethora
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a plethora
 of evolutions and changes. In recent times, searching for one’s roots and
belongingness
something owned; any tangible or intangible possession that is owned by someone
belongings
has gained
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have gained
 popularity in some countries.
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 essay will discuss how people these days are more inclined towards knowing about their family
history
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, so that they can find out more about
themselves
objective case of they
them
. It will
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 discuss how it will lead to positive development as people will become
for
to a considerable degree; very much
far
 more tolerant and accepting towards each other. With the passage of time, our mind is becoming more curious towards our existence. People are always looking for answers and want to know about their family
history
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. As the
world
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 is progressing, there has been an increase in inter- racial marriages. Since, so many cultures and nationalities have merged, the true essence of cultural heritage is losing with time.
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, people want to know more about their ancestral background.
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, now one can find out about their ancestors’
history
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 through a DNA testing. The reason why it has been made possible is because people are more interested in getting themselves tested to gain more knowledge about their
history
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. Finding out about our
history
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 will only bring
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 outcomes. Knowing about one’s
history
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 in
this
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 multi-cultural
world
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 will mitigate racism and prejudice. People will be more accepting and tolerant towards each other.
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, there has been an increase in hate crimes in the recent years. The
world
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-wide protest against racism has brought light to what the marginalized societies go through because of prejudice. Researching on one’s family
history
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 will only prove to be beneficial. To conclude, the rise in research on one’s
history
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 in some countries will increase
further
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 with time. The reason for
this
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 is our curious mind looking for answers about
oneselfourselves
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. Finding about our ancestors will only be
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 as it will help reduce racism in the
world
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 and make people more tolerant towards each other.
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