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Rich countries are getting richer while poor countries are getting poorer. what is the cause of this

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Currently developed nations are getting
wealthy whereas
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wealthy, whereas
 impoverished nations are impoverishing day by day. Due to
impact
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the impact
 of
technology
 and
education
, some countries have turned to modern ones. They are improving
technology
 as
technology
 can cover economy and social development. That’s why they are allocating a great deal of budget on
technology
 and
education
system
. When it comes to
education
,
education
 produces experienced and talented cadre which means that having a qualified and qualitative study can help to work
easy
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easily
 in
variety
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a variety
 of jobs. As a consequence the attempts are showing their very good result at present.
However some
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However, some
 people think that poor countries are getting poorer. Because they opt for only political affairs, political matters,
low
the collection of rules imposed by authority
law
, constitution and so on.
Furthermore
, little attention is paid to the
education
system
, and contracts for young people are
also
 inadequate and the role of
technology
 is unsatisfactory.
Also
, the
government
 has not provided with
technology
 for the educational places, it includes university, school as well as college. As a consequence, country’s reputation is not growing. It is important that action is taken to combat these problems. In order to progress,
Government
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the Government
 has to take into consideration to
education
 and
technology
 as well as entrepreneurship.
First step
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The first step
 is adequate budget allocation
on
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of
for
education
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the education system
system
. If
education
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the education system
system
 is old they have to plan
new
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a new
 one, on the planning new one it requires lots of money. It is important that the
government
 assumes
this
 responsibility.
Secondly
,
role
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the role
 of
technology
 should be the major which means that,
government
 have to equip with modern
technology
 and other equipments to educational places. It can help them to do something not only theoretical but
also
 practical. Practicality is one of the most important things for productivity.
As a result
, students can get advice from another country’s
tutors
Suggestion
tutor
 and professors. It is chance to implement their goals.
Third
, business and marketing
also
 can contribute to the development of the state. The
government
 should introduce lending to young cadres.
This
 means that, if they have the money, they can begin their new project and business.
A part
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Apart
 from
this
,
this
 is an opportunity for the unemployed to get a job. All these factors contribute to the growth of the state.
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