Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Development of the country depends on

progress

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the progress

of the nation in all fields of work. There is more preference given

for

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the entertainment society rather than the social services by the

government

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. I completely agree that including new methods in public services is more beneficial for the well being and growth of the country. Many decades ago people did not enjoy luxurious

facilities but now

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facilities, but now

due to

development

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the development

in the

technology people

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technology, people

spend their leisure time by watching movies at

theaters

a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented

theatre

or enjoying music concerts at weekends.

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also

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possible due to the support which

government

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has shown for

such

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amenities. People are now having a better standard of living which gives

they

objective case of they

them

a decent status in the society.

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we can't ignore the lack of medical and educational facilities which we do not have. Insufficient beds in hospitals for the needy and schools for poor children are increasing day by day as

government

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doesn't have enough funds to support these facilities. Some people don't opt for expensive treatment because of poor financial background which leads to increase in death rate and even spread of communicable diseases.

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Thus

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Thus, government

government

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should come up with policies which would provide affordable medication for destitute and better education facilities

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for

children specially

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children, especially

children especially

in villages so that they have a better future. Entertainment is part of everyone's life but supporting poor people so that they can enjoy a better living is of utmost importance.

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Therefore I

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Therefore, I

believe that

government

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should spend more money on public services rather than investing into luxurious amenities and their maintenance.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

261 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

cultural enrichment
expression of creativity
promote diversity
enhance social cohesion
boost tourism
job creation
stimulate economic growth
improve quality of life
essential services
maintenance and development

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