Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is thought by some people that, the best available way to decrease criminal activities is to provide a longer
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, while others believe that there are other ways to alleviate crimes.
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essay will examine both sides of the argument and outline my opinion. On the one hand, putting criminals
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prisons for a long time can be
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a much better method
in terms of the situation and consequences of crimes.
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, Some people killed a person to protect her or himself, and sentenced
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and other people like murderers and rappers they all have to put in
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forever because they have no rights to live among society and
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protecting other citizens.
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long time punishment might provide them to think what they did and motivate them after they free they will not carry out a heinous
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, there would be other
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ways, such
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as giving criminals a
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chance and enforcing them to do community services
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Some countries violent criminals sentenced the death penalty,
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, the members of terrorism organisations and murderers. But we have to think that we have no rights to kill
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to live so
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of killing
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chance.
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economize large sums of national budget. In my opinion, the types of crimes would be taken into account when deciding them a punishment. For major criminals like rappers and murderers should put in
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forever in terms of protecting other individuals, but minor criminals should do other chores in society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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