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Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced number of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the past, people who wanted to communicate with friends had to send snail mails or meet face-to-face.
However
, nowadays, people can use many new forms of communication like email, messaging, etc., on social media to interact with their friends without meeting face-to-face. It is assumed that
this
 has had a bad influence on their relationship and social lives. Personally, I partially agree with the assumption. It is true that people spend much time messaging on their phone and do not see their real friends so much. I think people nowadays have to work and study a lot, so they hardly have time to invite their friends to go to a cafe for a chat because it takes a lot of time to go to somewhere and wait for their friends.
However
, if people spend many hours chatting on their smart phone, it can have bad impacts on their health. In the other words, people can have health-related problems like obesity, nearsightedness, even heart attack,...
However
, modern ways of communication make people social lives better than in the past.
For instance
, the weather is rainy and we can not go to see our friends face -to-face. We can make a video call with our friends through Facebook, Zalo,... Anyway, modern forms of contact
such
 as email and messaging are very convenient and time-consuming. In conclusion, I think that modern methods of contact have many good aspects, but they
also
 have some bad effects on our social lives. Anyway, it depends on the users.
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