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Alternative energy sources that use the natural power of the wind,waves and sun are too expensive and complicated to replace the coal, oil and gas that we use to power our cities and transport. what extend do you agree and disagree with this opinion?

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Current days every country is seeking for alternative and cheap
energy
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 source. In
this
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 way some technologies prefer to take
energy
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 from natural occurrence, some count it too costly. As
enery
(physics) a thermodynamic quantity equivalent to the capacity of a physical system to do work; the units of energy are joules or ergs
energy
 is
main resource
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the main resource
 of advancement of any field, every organization
want
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wants
 to take it more and more by spending less and less money in order to enlarge their profit by shooting two rabbits with
one
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 bullet. To replace old style
energy
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 taken from oil, coal as well as gas, by solar and wind powers requires a
lotof
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lot of
 expenditure. Since
new system
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the new system
 is
totaly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
totally
 different from previous
one
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, the former must be built
by
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from
with
 zero and
latter
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the latter
 should be demolished as well. As these accomplishments are in need
for
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of
 much labour and financial support, to make it
real
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really
 will be too expensive.
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 mining a coal and absorbing oil and gas from underneath of the earth are additional effort to produce power. If these manufacturing processes are altered with ready mechanical
energy
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such
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 as wind and waves,
one
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 step will be omitted and it will be cheaper in
futhure
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the future
future
although
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 a lot of sums are spent on initial building steps.
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Moreover these
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Moreover, these
method
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methods
is
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are
 useful for nature
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of not emitting toxic fumes in the air. By doing
these
denotes a person or thing
this
 we can save our environment and our health simultaneously. As we
can not
can not
cannot
 have
one
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 without loosing other, each side has both advantages and drawbacks. Since the
one
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 side is usually more than the other, I think to
built
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build
 new
eco
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Eco
 powers is more efficient for our life
although
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 it demands to spend from government budget a lot.
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