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Nowadays some professions such as doctors, lawyers and engineers are paid much higher than ordinary workers. What do you think of this trend? Are there any jobs which you think should offer higher salaries.

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The earning of professionals
such
 as doctors
,
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,
lawyers and engineers
hae
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
have
who
has
 often been
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the subject matter of a conversation or discussion
subjected
suggested
 to analysis stating that it is quite unfair to the other skilled workers who equally put in
same amount
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the same amount
 of hard work.I find
this
 debate bit ridiculous the so called profissional worker have put in immense efforts towards securing their professional degrees,and their jobs are more demanding requiring higher order thinking and sometimes these individulas have to sacrifice their personal leisure and simple pleasures to cater to the needs of other individuals
for example
 a doctors is requred to be on call 24*7 be it night or day an engineer needs to brave the nature or scale the heights that no feeble hearted can do. Let me give the example of Mahatma Gandhi
,
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,
who as a lawyer could
comprehen
get the meaning of something
comprehend
 the evil of
foriegn
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
 rule and fought it to bring freedom to his nation.
However
,
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,
I believe that teachers should
also
 be included in
this
 category because
it
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It
 is not possible to cultivate great minds without the relentless efforts of an educator. Having said
this
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,
I would like
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to recapitulate
 that the above mentioned
professional dserve
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professional, deserve
professional deserve
professional deserves
 getting higher salaries for their efforts and dedicated work they provide to the nation and contributions towards is
deveolpment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
developments
 and growth.
Hence
 it is fully justified to give them high salaries.
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