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16. Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the citizens. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It
Suggestion
It's
 irrefutable that the environment is the best gift
bestoted
present
bestowed
 upon mankind by the god
almight
having unlimited power
almighty
.Taking care of
ot
the thing named or in question
it
 should be the most important obligation of the mankind.Man is dependent on the environment for his basic survival.
However
,
Accept space
,
that very man is responsible for its neglect and destruction
.
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.
We are aimlessly cutting down forest destroying the biodiversity without any concern about the devastation and
distruction
the termination of something by causing so much damage to it that it cannot be repaired or no longer exists
destruction
 it is going to bring in future. Man
eviornmentalist
someone who works to protect the environment from destruction or pollution
environmentalist
 like the green peace organization are
fricely
in a physically fierce manner
fiercely
 fighting the depletion of our natural resources they are
campaning
the campaign of a candidate to be elected
campaigning
championing
complaining
agrssively
in an aggressive manner
aggressively
 to create awareness and protect our environment.But sometimes it requires a force of a guiding hand to accomplish
fanthom
a ghostly appearing figure
phantom
tasks it
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tasks, it
 is here that the government should step in and formulate policies and laws that favour environmental protection.
Thus
 to sum it all up we can recapitulate that
evironmental
of or relating to the external conditions or surroundings
environmental
 protection is
joint responsibilty
Suggestion
a joint responsibility
joint responsibility
joint responsibilities
of
Suggestion
Of
 the common citizens as well as the government.
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