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Some people say that history can teach us many important values and lessons, but others think it is unnecessary to learn from the past. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#people #history #values #lessons
Every human
beign
the state or fact of existing
being
 in
this
 world has
experience
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experienced
 all sorts of emotion on his lifetime.
This
 either gives a joy or grief to them. It is overall
an
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a
 lesson that they will not forget or some have to erase from their
life
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lives
.
Other
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Another
 portion of the people argues thinking
one
's past is a waste of time. Will discuss both the views of
masses
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the masses
 and at the
end i
Accept comma addition
end, I
end I
 will give my own opinion on
this
.
To begin
 with, everyone faces problems in their
life
. It is either make them or break them. A good human soul moulds with the nice character.
This
 particular
traits
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trait
 cannot be obtained while
one
 born, it will grow inside them over the years through facing sorrow and happiness. And it
finally
 makes him a good human being.
For instance
, if a matured soul is facing
uncerainty
being unsettled or in doubt or dependent on chance
uncertainty
, it
will not broke
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will not break
won't break
 down rather they will face the consequences or try to find
solution
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a solution
 out their vast experience they had earlier.
On the other hand
, looking
one
's past
life
 is merely rotten their present day.
One
 has to move on and they should not stick their mind to the incidents happened once in their
life
. As an example to illustrate
this
,
robert
United States parliamentary authority and author (in 1876) of Robert's Rules of Order (1837-1923)
Robert
bruce
king of Scotland from 1306 to 1329; defeated the English army under Edward II at Bannockburn and gained recognition of Scottish independence (1274-1329)
Bruce
 the king of
scotland
one of the four countries that make up the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland; located on the northern part of the island of Great Britain; famous for bagpipes and plaids and kilts
Scotland
 had many
loss
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losses
on
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in
 his battle, but he never gave up. If he thinks about the defeat, he
wont
will not
won't
 become
an
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a
 king
to
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of
in
scotland
one of the four countries that make up the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland; located on the northern part of the island of Great Britain; famous for bagpipes and plaids and kilts
Scotland
. Ignoring the past will always
helps
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help
 us excel in
life
. To sum up
this
 discuss
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would recommend
one
 has to get the experience
on
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of
in
 the past and do not live
on
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with
 that just keep marching towards the future with the
happient
enjoying or showing or marked by joy or pleasure
happiest
 moments in
life
.
Submitted by Raj Mohan Ganapathy on

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