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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarize the information by selecting an reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pictures
below demonstrates
Suggestion
below demonstrate
 the figures of a
park
 opened to all levels of people. It was
firstly
 opened in the 19th century. The overview, for the garden before and after
is
Suggestion
being
 that they both had the same features, but sorted in different places and maybe are removed or added things.
Firstly
, we will talk about the old garden “Arnold Avenue”. It had a beautiful fountain in the middle. Lots of rose gardens were separated in different corners of the
park
. Seats were
also
 set randomly. The avenue had two main entrances. One opposite the fountain and the other was
also
 on the opposite, but in the other half of the
park
. A noisy stage was on the
lift
location near or direction toward the left side; i.e. the side to the north when a person or object faces east
left
 of the fountain it was a stage for musicians.
Secondly
, and
on the contrary
, the
park
 today has a Rose Garden in the middle surrounded by seats and one rose garden separated in the
lift
location near or direction toward the left side; i.e. the side to the north when a person or object faces east
left
 corner. The stage was replaced with an Amphitheater for concerts. There was an extra entrance door added in the car
park
 garage. There was a pond for water
plants but
Accept comma addition
plants, but
 was replaced now with the children's play area. At the end, I think the
park
 will always be beautiful no matter what changes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Amphitheater
  • Landscaping
  • Recreational facilities
  • Grassy areas
  • Flowerbeds
  • Pathways
  • Seating areas
  • Modern amenities
  • Children’s play area
  • Accessibility
  • Environmental impact
  • Social impact
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