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some governments spend a lotof money on exploring space. some feel that this investment justified while other think that money should be spent on public services like healthcare and education. discuss both views and give your opinion

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Few sections of the society believe that spending huge amount of
money
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 on exploring space is a good idea;
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, others argue that
money
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 must be spent to improve public services,
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 as,
healthcare
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 and
education
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both the views and argue why the Government should invest
money
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 to improve human lifestyle. There are two primary reasons why the exploration of
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universe
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the universe
 is important, mainly being, searching another planet like earth and searching for other lives.
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, Earth is getting overpopulated and scientists are investing
money
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 to explore outer space for a new planet which has a similar environment like earth; So, human can start living there.
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, there are many more galaxies in the
universe
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 and researchers believe that there are more lives in the
universe
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.
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 why government is investing an extensive amount to explore the
universe
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.
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, it is often believed that the Government must invest in their
education
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 and
healthcare
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 system.
Education
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 is an important part of life and if there are more educated people in the country, they will provide for their country’s growth.
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 to
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,
education
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also provide
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also provides
 more job opportunities.
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, the Government should
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 spend on
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healthcare
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health care
 because there are some diseases for which cure has not been found.
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, a recent research shows that 10 percent of human population only died because of cancer, because not even one country is able to find the cure of cancer.
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 is why the government should spend more on
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healthcare
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health care
 and
education
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. To conclude, exploring the outer space is important, but it is not important than human life.
This
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 essay discussed why the Government should prioritize improving human lifestyle.

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