many people think student should choose what subjects they take in school instead of published Curriculums. what do you think?

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Deciding

wether

introduces two alternatives

whether

to let the students

to choose

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choose

the subjects they are going to study in school by themselves or just to force them to go after the routine existing

curriculums

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curriculum

needs experts to intervene

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In my

opinion there

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opinion, there

should be an adjusted curriculum for

taken

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taking

subjects in schools. To explain my point of view, at

first

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it should be considered that people at

the the

definite article

the

age of attending school are not completely capable of deciding

thouroghly

in an exhaustive manner

thoroughly

about

evey

(used of count nouns) each and all of the members of a group considered singly and without exception

every

detail of needs. They may decide not to take a course

justt

and nothing more

just

base

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based

on what they hear from other children. In

adition some

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addition, some

addition some

subjects

such

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math are

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math, are

essential for everyone's daily life.

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in addition

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, taking all the subjects included in the pre-prepared curriculums, will help students to find about their

favorite

something regarded with special favor or liking

favourite

fields and their passion.

This

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will lead them to follow the suitable path.

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the society will not face a group of frustrated, not yielding people, who go to work without any enthusiasm

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, If students choose not to take some certain subjects in future we are going to confront unavoidable

consequencs

a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon

consequences

consequence

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, supposing most of

studets

a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution

students

choose not to take history

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in future there are numerous people who

don't know anything even

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don't even know anything

about their own

contries

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country's

countries

history.

Furthurmore

in addition

Furthermore

, taking all the subjects included in the pre-prepared curriculums, will help students to find about their

favorite

something regarded with special favor or liking

favourite

fields and their passion.

This

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will lead them to follow the suitable path.

Therefore

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the society will not face a group of frustrated, not yielding people, who go to work without any enthusiasm. They will be discouraged

bybtheir

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jobs, they'll become dismal and over time the become inefficient. I come to the conclusion that our children should be provided with a set curriculum

withh

expresses the means used

with

certain subjects if not all of them at school.

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subjects

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subject

should be

chosed

one who is the object of choice; who is given preference

chosen

according to the fundamentals of minimum cultivation of

personality

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the personality

of our children.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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many people think student should choose what subjects they take in school instead of published Curriculums. what do you think?

Fully explain your ideas

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