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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where where relevant.

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The plans in question depict the changes that have been made in the Grange park since it was
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 inaugurated.
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, several other features were dramatically altered. The five seats which were originally positioned Almost randomly around the premises workers, were collected around the central Rose Garden which had been a fountain in the old design, in spite of the fact that there were five of them in the post, they are only four now. They were placed in accordance with four Cardinal directions. The public garden used to have 3 Rose Garden; 2 on both sides of the northern entrance and
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 on the South turn wall opposite the stage.
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 the number of these throws gardens has been reduced to two.
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, the common two of the Rose gardens were illuminated in the new design and two remained-namely The the central
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 and the
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 situated in the northern left corner of the garden.
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 more new feature is introduced In the recent design-A water feature which came in place of the old glass house which used to be on the right-hand side as visitors come through the Elden St and transfer stop.
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, an Amphitheatre for Concerts was added
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 to the Western Wall to the South of the Rose garden.
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, a cafe was built right beside the Arnold avenue entrance and on its left as
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 comes through it. The water plants, pond was restructured into a new children's play area.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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