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The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum between 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum between 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The maps illustrate how
museum
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 of science and technology has transformed over
20-year
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a 20-year
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 period ( from 1996 to 2016 ).
Overall
,
due to
visitor 's
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visitors'
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 needs, the
museum
 has supplemented and upgraded many rooms with more
function
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functions
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 during the period of 20 years. And that brings the
museum
 many
attraction
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attractions
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from
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to
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 the visitor. On the left side of
two
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the two
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 maps, writing desks in 1996
has
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 been upgraded into computers in 2016. The print room has
also
 been knocked down and became a digital technology room with 3D cinema adjacent
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to
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itto
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. The electric car exhibition in 2016 has replaced the diesel engine exhibition in 1996. Anh the cafe has been enlarged on the restaurant. In 2016, the
museum
has
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narrowed the parking lot for cars and added
the
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a
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 bicycle park right
next
 to the car park. Another change
of
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on
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 the right side of
two
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the two
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 maps was the solar wind area. They
have
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constructed a solar wind area, which was a blank space in 1996.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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