You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter: correct the information in the article explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Danubia Juliao, I am one of your loyal readers.
However
, I am writing
this
letter regarding an article
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in the magazine
this
week, which brought
a wrong
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information
about my
town
, Ubtsfore. On
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page number 35 the periodic lists the importance of certain industries, putting
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tourism in the
last
position. I would like to bring to your attention that my
town
's economy is completely moved by the tourism sector, which can be proved by the search released by the Senso 2020. According to
this
reliable and official source,
this
sector is the
first
one in importance,
information
which you can be found on their website (www.senso.com).
Furthermore
, it is imperative to send the right
information
for your readers as it will be a recognition of
this
sector value, as well as a great opportunity of showing to them what we are good at.
Besides
that, it will bring more tourists as well as investors to my
town
. For
this
reason, I would like to ask you to correct
this
information
on the
next
edition of the magazine, making sure to bring the attention to your readers about the previous wrong
information
. Thank you for taking the time to read my letter. I look forward to reading your
next
edition with my
town
on more time in it. Yours faithfully, Danubia Juliao.
Submitted by danubiajuliao on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rectify
  • Misrepresentation
  • Tourism
  • Editor
  • Credibility
  • Accuracy
  • Local heritage
  • Fact-checking
  • Repercussions
  • Counteractive measures
  • Publishing ethics
  • Clarification
  • Factual error
  • Misconception
  • Authenticity
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