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It is often said “ when is Rome, do as Romans do”, do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they are visit? Do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language?

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To acquire the
culture
 without comprehending the
language
 is not a sensible decision.
language
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Language
 is an intricate part of the
culture
 it can not be
allineated
terminate, end, or take out
eliminated
.
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.
However
,
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,
when we reflect on the aspect of assimilating and adopting the
culture
 of
certain nation
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certain nations
a certain nation
,
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,
 I presume that one should reflect upon it in a positive manner.Because when we move to a foreign country we often feel isolated because we do not follow the same cultural norms that those around us do
.
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.
This
 feeling often creates many hurdles in our way
.
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.
We sometimes might act in
way
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a way
ways
 that might be considered as offensive to people of other cultures.
Moreover
,
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,
if we are familiar with the
language it
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language, it
 will facilitate in opening the doors of communication for us
,
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,
we become more approachable to others
.
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.
The values and ideologies that are represented by the foreign
culture
 become more clear to us. We can relate more openly and
also
 avoid misunderstandings to a great extent. Even though,' we should try our best to create
a
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an
 amicable
culture
 around
us we
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us, we
 should not completely give up on our own cultural identity. We should try to learn the
language
 and use it to our advantage explain the beauty of our own
culture
 to the others and create a friendly atmosphere around us.
This
 will help us in adjusting
in
Suggestion
to
 a new country and make friends more easily.People of other cultures will readily accept us and reach out to help us. In conclusion, it should be noted
that is
 not wise to
simiply
and nothing more
simply
immitate
reproduce someone's behavior or looks
imitate
imitated
 the
culture but
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culture, but
also
 to understand the
culture
 before we make it our own
.
Accept space
.
Therefore genuin
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Therefore, genuine
Therefore genuine
 attempts should be made towards learning the
language
also
.
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