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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change others however think that change is always a good thing . Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #lives #change
Some group of people likes to continue their daily routine activities, they don’t like to take high-risk in their
life
.
whereas
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Whereas
, another group of people says that
,
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,
 variation is significant in every one’s
life
.
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.
However both
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However, both
has
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have
 its own pros and cons.
Therefore before
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Therefore, before
commending
make or write a comment on
commenting
commencing
 on my decision, both the opinion would be discussed in the following paragraphs. To start with, people regularly follow the same pattern either it may be career oriented or personal things. They think they can get promotion in their
job
 as per the seniority level and the experience gained from the same organization.
Moreover
, they don’t like to take
risk
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risks
 by
doing
the act that results in something coming to be
making
 some wrong decisions. It is because of the present situation in the
job
 market. So they simply continue their daily tasks without any modification to maintain their
job
 security.
On the other hand
, some people
believes
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believe
 that, development is important to upgrade their skills and to achieve the
next
 level in their owns
life
. They don’t like to work with the same role and organisation for
number
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a number
 of years. They improve their career by preferring the right
job
 at
right time
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the right time
. They keep up-to-date with recent technology in the industry to survey their
life
’s with proper and happier lifestyle. For instants, a survey conducted on university of Australia in the year 2015 reveals that people
likes
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like
 to work for different organisation is higher than that of people works for the same organisation throughout their
life
’s To sum up, both
side
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sides
seems
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seem
 to have their own merits and demerits.
However
, I persuade that change is unavoidable and necessary if someone wants to keep up-to-date with a society and in their owns
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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