CONSUMERISM AND SOCIAL COMPETITION IN INDONESIAN SOCIETY

Many of Indonesian community obsessed
on
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with
hunting the exotic animals (Emerson, 2018). It is proven by how the celebrities and elites exhibit their exotic animals on social media and TV. Those pets
includes
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include
Savannah Cat,
sphynx
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Sphynx
cat, tiger, and many more (Pasha, 2019). On the other side, there are
also
some people who willing to take
risk
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risks
just for the consumerism and social status. It is demonstrated by several cases.
Firstly
, case of Indonesia socialite who stole a Louis Vuitton handbag in Melbourne, Australia (Beers, 2020). Another case comes from the issue of prostitutions that often occurred.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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