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In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extent do u agree or disagree?

Employment of
both
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 genders has become a necessity in
recent
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the recent
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 era.Most of the countries have worked males and females for
full time
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full-time
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 jobs,
hence
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, it requires
both
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 of them to share the
household
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 tasks.Without a shadow of doubt, I would go
along with
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 the mentioned statement.
Although
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,
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apply
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women
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 are responsible
to look
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for looking
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 after the house as a standard rule,
but
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apply
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,
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apply
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she
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they
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chooses
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choose
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 to struggle
as
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apply
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to provide a better life to
her
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their
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 loved ones.Indeed, in
plethora
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a plethora
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 of developing countries
such
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 as Pakistan, India and Bangladesh, where the poverty rate is extremely high,
in addition
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,
regular
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a regular
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 rise in inflation has
enforced
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forced
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 more
ladies
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women
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to
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into
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 the job.Surely,
such
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group
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a group
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 of female spends their whole
day
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 in their workplace and when they return back a list of
household
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 chores
is awaiting for
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awaits
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 them.Mostly males in
such
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 regions are not willing to help out their spouse or
opposite
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the opposite
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genders
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gender
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 in their
household
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 endeavour,
may be
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maybe
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due to
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 male
dominant
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male-dominated
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 culture or so.
For instance
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, maids in
such
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 countries struggle whole
day
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in
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apply
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cleaning and washing dishes at other people 's
residence
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residences
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,
also
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,
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apply
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 when they return back to
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home
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home,
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 they have to serve their husbands and children as well.Generally, no one notices that they are making
such
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individual
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individuals
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 mentally and physically ill.
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, the
western
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Western
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 world has feminine in power.
Usually
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females
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females'
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 task
to
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is to
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 satisfy their own
carving
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craving
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 towards career success.
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, males in
such
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area
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areas
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 of the world are more
broad minded
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broad-minded
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 and interested
to support
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in supporting
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 their partner
both
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for
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at
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 work and
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home
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at home
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.To illustrate an example, one of
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my friend
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friend
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friends
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 and her husband
has
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have
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 divided their
household
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 performance,
such
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as
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that
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 she does the cooking and her husband winds up
by
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apply
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doing the dishes.Certainly,
such
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women
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 can get rest and time for themselves to refresh for the next
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day
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day's
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 routine positively. In conclusion,
It
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it
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 is absolutely fair if men and
women
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 share the job at
home
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, after
both
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 of them
working out
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have worked
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 for the whole
day
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.In fact, dividing the
household
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 work among men and
women
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 can
rise
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raise
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the respect and understanding with each other.
In
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From
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 my perspective,men should help
his
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their
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 partner at
home
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 as she is
also
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 contributing her share to support financially.

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