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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Different people have different opinions related to the happiest ultimatum in their lives. Some find teenage
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 as the fascinating part of
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 while others vote for youth
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. In my point of view the memorable
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 between the former and the latter depends on person to person. Every stage of
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 brings joy and sorrow in our lives depending on the circumstances we are in. Teenage years are those years when the
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 is full of colours like a rainbow. In
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 of
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, each and every individual consider himself/herself over the 7th cloud. Many enjoy their freedom to the fullest. Students in the
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 have the great fun of friendship and brotherhood. Some get their soul mates, and many have a crush on another and not even able to express the feelings. Joyful events like parties, night outs, hang out with friends and loved ones are at prime at
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. Studies are mostly neglected by
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 goers in the excitement of
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 bunk and go out for movies with friends.
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 to adolescence, adult
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 has more responsibilities. People are in worry of getting good jobs and settling down to their businesses.
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, In spite of all the responsibilities adulthood
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 brings positive and happy moments in
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 of all. People find themselves more enthusiast to achieve something and when they are into it, they feel self satisfied and relaxed. Some enjoy evenings with their old school or
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 friends, memorising their teenage notorious deeds, while some make new friends, knot ties in new relations and more than happy with them.
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, adults develop great qualities of maturity, patience, understanding and many more. To recapitulate, both the stages of
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 have their own panorama of happiness and gratefulness. In adulthood people cherish their lives with new beginnings like satisfactory jobs, marriage, having kids, new friends and hanging out with old friends. Teenagers enjoy their
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 with their friends and partners with full of freedom and a little pressure of studies and parents.
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, both the ages have their own ups and downs which all the people face with full enthusiasm and positivity.
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