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Many parts of the world are losing natural resources such as animals, forest, fresh water. Is this really happening? Why do the resources need to be saved?

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The growing consumption of natural resources has dwindled several things
such
 as animals, forest and fresh
water
.
This
 is an emergency for
humand's
an automaton that resembles a human being
humanoid
human's
life
 in the future, so each of us must have our own awareness about the conservation and recovery of natural resources. If
humand
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humans
 do not save the resources, they will be dwindling shortly in
near future
Suggestion
the near future
, so, the use of alternative sources of energy, including wind power, rain power and nuclear power is necessary.
This
 will help to curb environmental deterioration,
hence
, the better environment for animals and
humand
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humans
 will be created. The protection of wildlife is
also
 a necessary law that the government has promulgated. Animals are one of the most important things in
humand's
Suggestion
human's
humans
life
. Protecting animals are protecting ourselves. Just image that one day in the future, there are not any kinds of animals except
humand
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humans
human
 can maintain their
life
 in the world.
That is
 terrible, right?
Finally
, the most important thing without which people cannot live is
water
. Every one can live up to seven days without eating any things, but just three days without drinking
water
, we cannot survive. The shortage of pure
water
 must be stopped and it is not hard to do it, just about your own awareness. In conclusion, the over exploitation of natural resources is happening all over the world.
Humand's
Suggestion
Humanoids
Humans
 duty is to prevent it from our
life
. Utilize new sources of energy, conserve wildlife and stop wasting pure
water
 are
also
the good
Suggestion
the best
better
 ways to do it.
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