In many places new homes are needed but the only place available for building them in the countryside .some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What’s ur opinion about this ?

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New homes are highly demanded in the several communities

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however only

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outskirts are vacant enough to accommodate new constructions and

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few people believe that countryside’ need to be protected rather than make new homes or buildings.I clearly endorse

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viewpoint due to the damage already occurred in the environment by the human interference. Fundamentally

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the human population has grown by the leaps and the bounds.

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the needs of people are

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exponentially increased

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human race exploiting the nature and has had detrimental effects which are deteriorates the balance of ecosystem intact.If people are persisting

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tendency would worsen the situation,

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the government and the people should put the best foot forward to mitigate

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menace.

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, developed countries like USA and UK have rigid rules for building constructions, which have predominantly protected the nature preserves.

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if people started to occupy the countrysides

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it will affect the indigenous

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rigid connective tissue that makes up the skeleton of vertebrates

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where many micro living organisms only could thrive in less human populated spheres.

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, it is vital to to protect the inhabitant of flora and fauna.Since

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the human influx to land area extensively damage the environment and global warming is one of the dire consequences of it.

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many animals and plants are on the brim of extinction due to the human extensive misconduct. Suffice to say,

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people need more homes since population flourished

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occupying countryside would not be a solution for

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due to the severe damage humans already made to the nature and we have yet to know that what is stored for the future in the unfathomable turn of time.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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In many places new homes are needed but the only place available for building them in the countryside .some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What’s ur opinion about this ?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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