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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, many popular consumer products like television, fridge, air-conditioning and many other products which have become a mirror of strong advertising and these goods has become the basic needs of every household, but these things are not the actual needs of
society
 in which particularly they are sold. Let's discuss
this
.
Firstly
, Now-a-days famous or popular consumer appliances has become a part of our life because with the help of
this
 goods one can use
this products
Suggestion
this product
these products
 and fulfilled their basic needs of their life.
This
 days very big MNC's which deals with consumer goods like LG, VIDEOCONE, MOBILE COMPANIES and many more different companies do their branding or advertising of their products on different sorts of online platforms through which they can earn money and generate more revenue and
this
also
 reflects the power of advertising because by watching the advertisement of
this
 products people usually gets attracted to buy
this
 products and due to
this
 it reflects the advertising company and more revenue is generated.
Secondly
, According to given topic it
also
 say's that
this
plural of "this"
these
 goods are not the actual needs of
society
 in which they are sold. Well, it depends according to the population of a country, whether what category of people wants to buy these goods. In a country large number of various types of people lives so its advertising companies who targets
this countries
Suggestion
this country
these countries
 which has a large population, so that the advertising of products gets more reflected to "N" number of people. There are
also
 some people, which are poor and
this
 needs did not matter to them.
Lastly
, according to my point of view, I disagree with the statement that
this
plural of "this"
these
 are not the real needs of the
society
 in which they are sold, because
this
 has become daily needs of our
society
.
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