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Some people say that due to the growing number of unfit and overweight people sport should be made compulsory in all educational establishments. Others claim that only voluntary decision to do sport helps people to be fit, but compulsory physical education embarrasses and turns away students who don't like sport.

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Obesity is one of the most common
problem
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problems
 in today’s world.
As a result
, more and more people start to take care of their half and bodies.
some
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Some
 of them pay attention
on
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to
special diet
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special diets
 and fresh food, others
practice
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are practicing
 new spots or go to the gym. Personally
,
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,
 I tend to thing that physical education should be our own
decision
.
First
 of all, a lot of young people have many complexes about their look, weight and body. Everyone wants to be fit, athletic
,
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,
 has a perfect
body but
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body, but
 sometimes there are some factors, so it becomes impossible.
Moreover
,
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,
 many young students said that physical education is the worst subject at school, and some of them write sick notes not to go to these classes. A lot of teachers put a huge pressure on teenagers to stay fit and
practice
 different sports.
Consequently
, their self - esteem is very low, they stay close to their acquaintances and do not interested in
sport
. As one of famous doctors has recently said that
voluntary
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the voluntary decision
decision
 to do
sport
 helps people
,
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,
 but compulsory physical education turns away young students.
On the other hand
, obesity is one of the most common illnesses nowadays. A lot of people have enormous problems with their weight and bodies. It
also
, carries other different dangers
for instance
 `; heart attaches
,
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,
 diabetes
,
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,
 problems with kidneys and others. Overweight people should start
practice
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practicing
sport
, but it must be their
on
belonging to or on behalf of a specified person (especially yourself); preceded by a possessive
own
decision
. To help
them we
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them, we
 should prepare a big action on the Internet, promote post about
sport
,
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,
diets and share them.
Moreover
, local authorities could organize special events for everyone who is interested in healthy lifestyle
,
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,
 different exercise which can help you to burn your calories. In conclusion
,
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,
 I strongly believe that started to
practice
 new
sport
 should be our own
decision
. We cannot put pressure on overweight people, because it has got an enormous impact on their minds. We must motivate them, be close
,
Accept space
,
 and help them to win their game with obesity.
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