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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The presented figure illustrates the ratio of renewable energy to total energy supply in 4 countries named Australia, Sweden, Iceland, and turkey between 1997 and 2010. Overall, Iceland enjoyed renewable
power
 more than any listed country, while Sweden's renewable
power
 supply was the least among all. Australia inexhaustible
power
 started from nearly 10 % in 1997 and followed by a mild decrease till 2010 to reach around 5%.
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 the other hand, Sweden's natural resources figure was exactly opposite to Australia with approximately 5% and almost 10% proportions in 1997 and 2010 respectively. Iceland and turkey were the only countries produced a significant amount of
power
 in comparison to others, the former generated the most. The year 1997 was the only year that Turkey was close to Iceland with about 40% production after 1997 the production gap between these two countries grew noticeably.
In addition
 to it, in the
last
 year, Iceland was producing energy approximately 40% more than turkey.
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