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More people live alone today than they did in the past. Do you think that this is a positive or a negative development ? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

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Compared to the past a
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having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue
relevant
 percentage of people live alone
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away from their family or friends
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which is not a beneficial trend for both individual as well as families. Unlike from the yesteryears people have to stay away
form
a giver or sender
from
 home for work or study
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they experience the negative effects of loneliness and mental stress.As a
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a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
result
 of being without a company to share the feelings and emotions the individual might get resentful and helpless in many
occassions
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occasions
locations
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which would be stressful for him to handle the pressure and to
stike
deliver a sharp blow, as with the hand, fist, or weapon
strike
 a balance with work or study.
For instance
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many youngsters who are staying alone get depressed and are suffering from various disorders associated with these, around the world.
Moreover
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the families who are not in the company of chaperones or beloved ones
also
 experience some kind of difficulties. For them, they always miss the presence of those who are away and not able to relish the life with one others company.
For example
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examine and note the similarities or differences of
compared
 to the
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past children
 who are away from the parent always urge for the love and care
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 them
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which would be
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 possible. In conclusion
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these days people are leading a
lonley
lacking companions or companionship
lonely
 life compared to the past and which is always a cause of stress and strain induced both in individual level an family level.
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