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Some people have the opinion that big shopping malls are expensive places as they offer high costs for the products which can be bought at much cheaper prices from local shops. On the other hand, some people think that such malls are absolutely the best places to visit for shopping. Discuss both the opinions and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Certain people think that shopping centre charges extensively than the small trader, while others argue that these big retail outlets are the finest places to visit for purchasing anything.
This
 essay will discuss both ideals and establishes my preference. To being with, shopping malls are expensive locations to buy anything, while regional vendors have the same products at its lesser prices.
This
 is because the tax imposed on the products is not applicable to individual sellers.
For instance
, headset purchased from a big store can be of a higher price, while the same phone bought from the local shop is inexpensive.
On the other hand
, most people prefer buying the material from these huge retail complexes.
This
 is because they give good quality products with proper bills and receipts, they even have return policies, so if the customer is not satisfied with their services they items can be returned. These centres would have varied facilities that attract families to come together and buy goods.
For example
, most of these places have centralized air conditioning along with the food court and a kids zone.
Hence
 the family feels relaxed and joyous to come to these places. In conclusion, many people believe that large shopping areas have costly products in comparison to the individual shops, while others argue that they find malls an exciting place to visit. In my opinion, these retailers having the facilities like trial policy, discount, and return policy
in addition
 to the comfort a customer gets while shopping is important.
Thus
, I think that going to these places is the best activity for buying things.
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