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Scientific innovation is always a positive thing and should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer.

As a widespread fact, leading us to a more convenient lifestyle, scientific innovations have an indispensable role in our modern life.
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favour that scientific novelties should be preserved at all
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, I do not advocate
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 given notion in terms of several reasons. To initiate, scientific inventions are used to create dangerous weapons and bombs that can kill people and cause environmental destruction.
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, the atomic bombs, which were dropped on Hiroshima and Nagasaki
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 of World War II,
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caused great damage to everything.
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, since humans tend to solve their
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 with violence all the time, collateral damage would be immense
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 these kinds of weapons.
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, there are many examples of
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 cases in history, and it will go on like
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 if humans continue creating these weapons.
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 but not least,
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 on the machines and scientific products, people have a tendency to become lazier and less capable of doing their jobs for themselves.
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, with the help of artificial intelligence, every human work can be done,
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, by robots too.
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 robots can get their work done faster and easier, nobody prefers to spend more effort.
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, people's creativity and problem-solving abilities are
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 becoming lost. All things considered,
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 scientific improvements have beneficial effects,
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 disadvantages outweigh the advantages. Since these improvements can cause huge losses for the human race, lack of imagination, and stupidity, they should not be encouraged
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 cost by thinking about their consequences.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas connect smoothly to one another.
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Clarify your stance in the introduction and summarize it again in the conclusion.
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Use a variety of examples to support your points, and explain them more clearly.
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You presented a clear opinion against scientific innovation.
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You included historical examples to support your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific advancement
  • progress
  • quality of life
  • technological breakthroughs
  • solutions
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • disease eradication
  • economic growth
  • job opportunities
  • curiosity
  • creativity
  • scientific exploration
  • knowledge expansion
  • negative consequences
  • ethical use
  • regulation
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