Full-time university students should spend a lot of time studying, but it is essential to be involved in other activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most of the students would benefit from some extra activities along with studies.
Personally I
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Personally, I
believe that students should spend some
time
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doing other activities
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as sports.
However
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,
theeir
of them or themselves
their
main attention should be on education.
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with, spending all the times with books can lead to many health problems.
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, spending most of the times with books can be stressful, which results in depression and in worst case scenario suicide.
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, students who spend more
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with books are not active and usually they have
sedentary lifestyle
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a sedentary lifestyle
sedentary lifestyles
, as
result
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a result
, students are at risk of being overweight.Simply
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all these affect could be result in long-term psychological problem and
laso
in addition
also
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put students under pressure while studying.
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pupils do not learn social skills as not being able to
spent
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spend
time
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with friends or some events.
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,
allocating some
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to other activities while studying have some benefits.
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Firstly
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Student
get
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gets
refreshed after these activities and they can concentrate easily.
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hand students
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hand, students
brain
get
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gets
tired if they study constantly.
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, they feel tired and lack energy which make difficult for them to concentrate all the
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beielve
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that students who
spen
pass time in a specific way
spend
spent
more
time
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with
books gain
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books to gain
good knowledge but to learn other skills,
such
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as
team work
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
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,
they have to participate in
activites
any specific behavior
activities
like sports.
On the other hand
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,
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,
giving some
time
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to extra
activities doesnt
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activities, doesn't
activities doesn't
mean that students have to focus on that but their main priority should be education. In conclusion
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,
Although
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It is necessary to give more
time
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to books while studying
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,
I
beilve
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that students should take enough
time
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out for other activities to avoid any impact on their health
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,
future life and study.
Also
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,
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,
students should avoid overindulgence in extra activities.
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