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Fossil fuels are the main sources in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy is encouraged. Is it positive or negative development.?

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It is impossible that Fossil fuels have played a vital role in producing
energy
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 in many nations.
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, promoting the
use
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 of renewable sources like
wind
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 and solar, it leads to the positive development because these sources are eco-friendly.
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, it is undeniable that the
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 of fossil fuels has increased at an alarming rate. The main point is that, they are non-renewable and take millions of years to make and we are finishing them at excessive rates.
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, it cannot be reused once it burned. Their carbon emissions are the main contributor to global warming, which leads to several problems like melting of glaciers, and depletion of the ozone layer and so on.
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,
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, renewable sources produce clean and fresh
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.
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, it creates a pollution free environment and increases the quality of our planet as well as life on earth. Alternative sources of
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 is an everlasting source of power. So more and more steps should be taken by the government to promote the usage of these natural resources,
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, solar
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 and
wind
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energy
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 because, if urgent steps are not taken
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 the time is not far when the whole earth will transform into empty land.
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,
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 of these alternative sources has some hurdles
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 as installation and setting up of solar panel and
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 farms is very high or expensive. The cost savings over the years easily justify
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 investment in solar or
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energy
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. To conclude, we can say that, the
use
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 of alternative sources of
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 is a positive development. They do not cause any kind of harm to the environment. Make earth clean and green, it should be our priority to invest in
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 development.
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