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Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life. Why is this trend occuring? What are the impacts of this development on both family and society?

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In the past, it is prevalent for a couple to get married and start a family at a young age.
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, the situation nowadays is different as couples tend to delay having a child. There are a number of reasons for
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 trend and some impacts, both negative and positive. One of the driving forces behind
this
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 trend is the changing of
society
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 in employment. More and more educated women are entering the workforce and
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, they get married and have children later in life.
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 is nearly incapable to change as women cannot combine both families and work properly. Having children has a high cost
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 as hospitalization funds, schooling, and clothing which makes couples prefer to have children late when their conditions are good enough.
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, couples from the countryside have low income and bad conditions would prefer getting to the city and wait until conditions are fine to have a child.
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 delay has led to several impacts on
society
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 and families.
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, it can be more difficult for older women to get pregnant and they may experience more health problems,
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 as miscarriage, high blood pressure, or diabetes, during pregnancy. One impact that could be positive to
society
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 is that when couples concentrate on work, that country would have a strong workforce.
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, when that generation of
workers
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worker
 retires, the country will lack workers, and they need to pay for
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 export.
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, Japan has an
old
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older
 workforce so they need to hire workers from other countries. In conclusion, several reasons have resulted in the fact that people delay having children and
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 has affected
society
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, both negatively and positively.
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