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Television entertains, but can it also educate? Do you agree?

#television
Many people claim that
television
 entertains. But I strongly believe that
television
also
 educate viewers about different topics of personal interest.
To begin
 with,
television
 programming nowadays includes a large variety of documentaries. All of them provide uncountable information about a specific topic. All of it is
tasted
tested and proved useful or correct
tested
 by professionals, which ensure that the knowledge viewers are getting is right.
For example
, documentaries about the sea, wars, and animals. Apart from
this
, there are some channels aimed
to
Suggestion
for
at
 children, in which are explained in a funny and interesting way some subjects as history or science.
As a result
, kids remember more easily facts, which may be useful when they grow older.
On the other hand
,
television
do not educate
Suggestion
does not educate
 when it
transmit
Suggestion
transmits
 a wrong message about actions people should and should not take.
For example
, there are programs about drugs and its surrounding. In those, is shown how much money people earn at it.
As a result
, viewers may think it is great business, when it harms a lot of people. To conclude,
television
 has programmes that do not contribute with positive stuff. But it
also
 has others which are great ways of
learn
Suggestion
learning
 more for adults, as well as for children.
Submitted by Alejandra Guaymás on

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