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what qualities become a good parents? use specific reasons

#qualities #parents
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I am fortunate to have good parents, so it is easy for me to identify the qualities that make them good. These qualities are unconditional
love
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,
trust
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, and
rspect
(usually preceded by 'in') a detail or point
respect
 for me. And brothers and sisters.
Firstly
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, the unconditional
love
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 is one of the most crucial features in proper development of the children. They nurture
thr
of them or themselves
their
the
 child and keep them from harm. As an example, the children who grow with loving parents, some children become good manners.
On the other hand
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, the ones who grow by themselves without the parents’
love
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, are more aggressive. To have
good society
Suggestion
a good society
, the
love
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 of parents
become
Suggestion
becomes
nesscessary
absolutely essential
necessary
unnecessary
.
Secondly
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, part of unconditional
love
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 is
trust
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. My parents
trust
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 us to do what is right.
For instance
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, without parents’
trust
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, we are not confident that. They
trust
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 us, so we
trust
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 them, we would never do anything to hurt.
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, I believe that respect is
most impertant thing
Suggestion
the most important thing
most important thing
. It is an essential for all people who deal with children.
For example
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, if the child is good at
History subject
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the History subject
 at schooling, the parents will not angry.
Instead
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 of annoying, they must have
encourage
Suggestion
encouraged
 him or her to better in
study
Suggestion
the study
studies
. It is may be more difficult to intend because they know their strengths. In conclusion, the qualities of a good parents are too numerous to name. It
also
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 depends on the situations,
however
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, all parents must have the qualities of
love
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, believe, and admiration.
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