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Some people believe academic success depends mostly on having a good teacher. Others argue that it is the attitude of the student that matters most. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #success #teacher #attitude #student #matters
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It is reckoned by several individuals, having a sterling mentor is necessary for the scholastic development of a student while others contend that it merely relies on the persuasions of the learner
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 instructors, as well as the learners’ approach, are equally important. A part of society has a
life-long
continuing through life
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 belief in the teachers due to various reasons. The preponderant is the experience attained
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To elucidate, an instructor encounters many children at a
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time, which
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an expert
expert
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 a teacher could easily acknowledge
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one's
 deficiencies, and could provide appropriate remedial solutions for the same; resultantly leads to better educational growth. At the same time, a guide is must be needed for the motivation of a child in a particular direction so that students could be able to do his best in the field of education. All in all, a mentor not only guides the learner but
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 give motivation for success.
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there is a part of society that asserts that only an optimistic approach towards studies could bring desired results. The preponderant reason for
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 belief is,
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 could learn anything if he wants to do so.
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, no
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 could teach a student mathematic
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if he really not enjoying it.
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, success is
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 built in mind, a student would only be worked hard for those subjects
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 he actually wants to learn
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interest, and
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 the positive attitude is the root of achieving goals in academics. To my mind, whether it is a teacher or a personal frame of mind,
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 are important to attain goals in studies. Any teacher could not help the
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 who is lacking confidence and willpower to do something.
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, without proper guidance and concept clearance, especially in difficult subjects
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 as science and mathematics,
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 could not pass with flying
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 proper instructions and willingness of learning would be helpful in academic success. In conclusion, It would be apt to say that for the desired scholastic objectives,
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 the expert guidance and optimistic approach of the learner leads to promising aim.
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