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most museums charge for admission while others free

#museums #charge #admission
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It is generally considered that most museums can be free as most people believe that every
people
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person
 should benefit from museums.
On the other hand
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, others believe that museums should not be free because most people can use these museums for their bad purposes.
Besides
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, they believe that if we want development of these museums, these museums should not be free. As far as I am concerned, people should not give
money
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 in order to enter museums in various aspects so I believe that admission is
disadvantegous
constituting a disadvantage
disadvantageous
.
To begin
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 with, there is no doubt that museums are prominent places to do research on any subject so students have to use these museums more than people,
however
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, students generally cannot enter these museums due to inadequate
money
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. By way of example, in Turkey many students who studying history cannot go to any museums until they graduate so they cannot
imrove
to make better
improve
 their.
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, museums should be free in order
to
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for
 people and especially students can improve their
knowlege
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
.
Furthermore
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, another
diasdavnatage
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 is that people do not want to give
money
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 to enter museums generally because they think that
money
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 can be used
more useful
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more usefully
instead
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 of giving museums. As a good illustration for
this
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, most people in the world do not prefer going museums. In the same way, these people’s children do not want to go to museums and
this
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 cause to disappear many
culture
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cultures
 because people cannot learn their history.
Consequently
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, I believe that museums
shoul
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 be free in order to improve people’s knowledge and prevent vanishing cultures.
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