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Over consuming sugar is unhealthy. Some people think that government should take the responsibility to control it. Others think that individuals should take responsibility of sugar intake. What is your opinion on this? Discuss both views.

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In today's world, diabetes is becoming a serious concern for society. Few people argue that the
government
 should interfere in
this
 matter, while some believe that an individual must look after their
sugar
 intake. In my opinion, both statements are correct. I will discuss it in
this
 essay. On the one hand, few people argue that the
government
 should take appropriate steps to control diabetes. According to them, the
government
 is responsible for the health of society;
therefore
, they should implement a law that regulates the use of
sugar
 in a food product.
For instance
, the Gujarat
government
 has passed a bill, which indicates that in any product, the
sugar
 content should not be more than 30 percent.
On the other hand
, some people believe that an individual has to look after their
sugar
 intake, not the
government
's responsibility. People should track their
sugar
 intake while consuming food daily.
For example
, if the product contains more amount of
sugar
 than, they should not eat it, which results in a balanced diet.
Moreover
, it's one's responsibility to look after their health. In conclusion, both the
government
 and the people are responsible for their health. It's not the responsibility of the
government
 alone.
Submitted by Sapna Sodavadiya on

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