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New technologies are important for successful neurosurgery but also has possible drawbacks. What is the positive and negative affect of technology in neurosurgery?

Neurosurgery
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 is the youngest and most expensive field among
of all medical fields
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all medical fields
. The main reason for the high cost is the cost of technologies used in operations and examinations. New technologies that are improving day by day make the field of
neurosurgery
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 even more successful. But, of course, there
are
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is
 still
sufficiently
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sufficient
 drawback in
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 field. What is the positive and negative
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
 of technology in
neurosurgery
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? It’s impossible to imagine
neurosurgery
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 without technology. All operational and examination tactics depend on radiological devices.
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, CT-computed tomography, MRI-magnetic resonance imaging, x-ray machines, etc. With the help of these devices, neurosurgeons can accurately diagnose patients.
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, with the help of microscopes designed for
neurosurgery
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, neurosurgeons can easily see the deepest parts of the brain.
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 to the positive effects, these technologies
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 have negative effects. X-rays from the devices we just mentioned are very harmful to the human body. These X-rays stimulate the formation of cancer cells in the human body. That’s
way
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the way
, doctors try to examine their patients with these devices as soon as possible.
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, the technologies used in
neurosurgery
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 have both advantages and disadvantages. As you know,
neurosurgery
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 takes a long time and, of course,
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 is undesirable. Scientists are currently working on technologies that could help end operations faster. In the near future,
such
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 devices are expected to revolutionize medicine.

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