Some people believe that sport has an important role in society. Others, however, feel that it is nothing more than a leisure activity for some people.
Nowadays there leisure activity. It is true that activity.
has
been positive effects that Change the verb form
have
sport
has gained inhabitants of society.Whereas
, some people
argue that the
Correct article usage
apply
sport
is not essential
part of our life it needs for leisure activities. first of all, it is undeniable Add an article
an essential
facts
that there are some reasons why Fix the agreement mistake
fact
sport
is vital in society. One of the reasons is that people
can be healthier more
than ever before. For Correct quantifier usage
apply
this
reason the
doctors are always recommending to Correct article usage
apply
people
occupied with various types of sports like running, walking, hiking
. Another reason is more injured inhabitants Correct word choice
and hiking
more
problem for Add a missing verb
have more
government
to cure them so Correct article usage
the government
government
do not need Correct article usage
the government
waste
money Fix the infinitive
to waste
for
injured residents in Change preposition
on
the
free hospital. Correct article usage
apply
Obesit
, heart attack, today has Correct your spelling
Obesity
been
decreased significantlyUnnecessary verb
apply
through
the world because of Change preposition
throughout
sport
. These days young generations often tend to sedentary activities such
as playing computer games instead
of this
parent
encourage their children to do Fix the agreement mistake
parents
sport
Wrong verb form
sports
the
children can improve their social interaction with peers. on the other hand, some Correct word choice
so the
people
think the sport
is nothing more thanAdd an article
a
sport
can count like
Change preposition
as
Correct article usage
an
Therefore
, not all people
can be professional sports player
so a lot of Fix the agreement mistake
players
people
do sport
when they want to relax or calm down. In conclusion, some Fix the agreement mistake
sports
people
believe the
Correct article usage
apply
sport
is leisure activity whereas
, I think the
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apply
sport
is plays
Wrong verb form
play
important
role in societyCorrect article usage
an important
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite