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Some people say that technologies such as mobile phones are disrupting social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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Humans invent things to make their social life more comfortable;
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, these technologies
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 as mobile phones have adverse effects too. I strongly agree with the latter view due to several reasons that I will discuss in greater detail in my essay.
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 with, mobile phones have made communication faster and cheaper,
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 one can easily reach their dear ones who are living in any part
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 the earth. It is
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 as mobiles are becoming
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smarter
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 people can share their special memories through social networks. To exemplify, nowadays people seamlessly share their personal messages, photos, documents on Facebook and WhatsApp easily through
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. It goes without saying that mobiles have adverse effects too on the society. Children have become less active and contain themselves within the walls and play mobile games,
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, they have fewer friends. Adults too have become socially inactive as they are well occupied in chit-chat with their buddies on social networking sites. Earlier people used to come out of their homes at night within society
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 scenarios are less visible nowadays. Parents are too busy with their mobiles that they often forget to spend valuable time with their children;
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, children feel isolated which affects their mindset too. After having discussed the most pertinent points, I feel that the only logical conclusion is that while the invention of mobiles has provided more comfort to the society, it has broadened the social gap between people and given rise to the feeling of isolation among people.
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