Discuss advantages and disadvantages of living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory and defend your preference.

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Many people hold an opinion that college students should stay on campus rather than living at

home

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. From my point of view, I agree with

this

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statement to some extend for several justifications. Life on campus may be more advantageous for university students than at

home

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with parents.

Firstly

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, living away from

home

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without

care

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from parents, the learners must take

care

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of themselves

like health, health

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, like health

, personal budgets. They will become more mature to concentrate on academic study as well as enhance their problem solving skills.

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, independence from parents at a young age is largely accepted and encouraged, especially when students reach the age of eighteen are able to earn a living on their own or gain valuable work experience. They will be free in choosing subjects, part time jobs for their own study.

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makes them feel very comfortable and

satisfactory

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satisfied

in all activities.

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, having lived in

hostel

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a hostel

, the students would have a chance to extend their relationship as they have to live together with other students. These social relationships could benefit students in their

career later as

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later career as

well as teach them the way to communicate and take

care

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of the surroundings.

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, There are some limitations when students living far from

home

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without parents.

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of all, they are short of parental

care

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and frequent observation, they are easily allured into illegal activities.

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, students have to worry about earning money. They are distracted by

finacial

involving financial matters

financial

difficulty, they are unable to pay full attention to their study. The students would have to learn to balance their

finance which

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finance, which

is the most vital thing to help them survive until the end of the moth.

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, they can have bad relationship outside because they lack parental control. From

this

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, they are affected to a diverse environment from various social and cultural backgrounds. In conclusion, there is no doubt that staying with family is a safe way for students, but it is

also

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better for them to live far away from their

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home

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homes

. Living

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the school’s campus, the learners are able to be mature,

indpendent

free from external control and constraint

independent

, and

skillful

having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude

skilful

with their own.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

356 words

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