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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved?

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In the world of almost no deficiency of
food
 and consuming items,
food
 has stopped serving the purpose of just sufficing hunger.
Food
 has become a source of amusement and
hence
 is available in varieties. A few of the major factors that come into play for
such
 a happening can be, the ever-busy life of people and the perspective about the
taste
 of healthy
food
. The always
busy fast
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busy, fast
 life of people
are pushing
Suggestion
is pushing
 them towards fast
food
. Even if people are concerned about their diet, they can not still get a staple one. People just
dont
do not
don't
 have time to cook a healthy meal for themselves or
dont
do not
don't
 find healthier options in the
food
 joints and restaurants in their reach. As a solution to
this
problem
 more number of
healther
improved in health or physical condition
healthier
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 and tastier options should be included in the menu of restaurants and
food
 joints which can be appealing to the maximum mass. Another cause of
this
 issue is the price of the
food
. It is well observed that healthy
food
such
 as a serving of salad is way more expensive than a tub of chicken wings. Since the price is less and the
taste
 is better, people tend to incline towards the less healthy and less pricey option. A to fix
this
problem
 can be to bridge the price difference which
wont
will not
won't
 be very hard to attain, as vegetables are cheaper than meat anywhere
.
Accept space
.
 More
recepies
directions for making something
recipes
recaps
 and dishes should be employed
into
Suggestion
in
 making healthy
food
 to fix the
problem
 of option and
taste
. In a world of fast life, it has become a task to maintain a healthy diet. More recipes and dishes should be employed to
making
Suggestion
make
 healthier
food
 options to fix the
problem
 of choice and
taste
. The
food
 prices should be brought down to meet the lifestyle of people.
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