In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence.

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It goes without saying that a family budget has changed over the

years so

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years, so

both parents need to bring the bacon to home

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Although

some people are of the opinion that it has a negative effect on children since they do not have enough support and guidance at home

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other people think that

this

is the best choice to have a better quality

life

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this

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This

essay will discuss both points of view.

To begin

, children not only gain new things

for

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life

at school they

also

have home to extend their knowledge and skills

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Thus parents

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Thus, parents

are the perfect mentors to guide children in their

life

journey not only during vacations but

also

in any single

daily day

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day

day day

For example

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Europe has Wednesday afternoons for workers in order to pass

this

time with their families

thus

they build better relationships

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On the other hand

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to have a better quality

life

a good income is more than necessary

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In that way parents can

enroll

enrol

kids in the best school as well as give them the enough resources for education.

Furthermore

, in that scenario there are no worries and pressure to make ends meet so it would help to have a better family atmosphere. In conclusion

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we have seen both sides of the coin where there are pros and cons

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I strongly believe that parents should find the perfect balance in their work

life

where their children are considered

first

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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dual-income households
financial stability
work-life balance
emotional well-being
parental involvement
social development
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childcare solutions
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In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence.

Fully explain your ideas

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Countries with along average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together?

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