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Task 2: The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, with the rapid development of the information technology, communicating transportation have become more various than ever before.
Although
 there is
such
 a huge amount of bad critics, social media still has so many good effects that can make people life convenient and comfortable.
Therefore
, I think the people who are using social media will be affected positively more than receiving negative things from it.
Firstly
, international geographic distances will be deleted significantly. Despite the fact that two people, who are living and working in different countries for a thousand - kilometre long, are not able to have a chance to meet each other with a cheap and suitable way, social media considerably solved
this
 problem by giving them a video phone call to know each other's lives.
For instance
, if people are busy with the work, they can absolutely create an online meeting with their friends, or their foreign relatives.
Moreover
, people can keep in touch with their buddies even they do not know any information about them. As a consequence, people relations will spread larger and larger. Not only can they get on with their members, but
also
 everyone will have their own happiness and cosiness.
In addition
, anyone is able to make a date with their friends easily online at anytime, anywhere.
Consequently
, social media helps people to make friends from all over the world. If a person has a necessity to learn news languages, it will be
such
 a perfect opportunity because of the ability of making foreign friends online. Especially, listening skill and speaking skill will have a chance to be improved substantially. In conclusion, social media is thought to bring bad habits to people who use it regularly by somebody.
However
, using it suitably is not bad, it can even help people's lives comfortable with their positive effects. Obviously, it is considerably effective to
such
 a huge amount of popularity.
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