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It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship. Do you agree? Why or why not? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

#money #friend #harm #damage #friendship
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Many people say that borrowing
money
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 from a
friend
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 has negative effects to the
friendship
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, but, in my opinion, it doesn'
t
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. There are several minds that make me think so,
such
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 as: true
friendship
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, better relationship, and help each other. Borrowing
money
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 from a
friend
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 doesn'
t
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 threat
friendship
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 at all.
First
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, when you have truly best friends who can lend you some
money
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, they won'
t
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 blame you even though if you can'
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 return it. They will think that good friends are far more important than just
money
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. You can find
money
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 everywhere, but where you can find
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 a good
friend
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?
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, If someone
lend
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lends
 his
money
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 to his best
friend
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, their relationship will be better; because, they will talk and figure out the problem together. When they are discussing the problem together, they can feel more closer, because the borrower will feel the same way as the borrowed person feel.
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, don'
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 you realize that if you lend someone
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, it means that you help him, even though if it is just a loan. You have done a pretty good job. He will see you in a better way. With your
money
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, he can find the way out of his problem easier. In conclusion,
borrowing
disposing of money or property with the expectation that the same thing (or an equivalent) will be returned
lending
money
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 to a
friend
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 doesn'
t
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 harm or jeopardize a
friendship
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. There are lots of advantages
from
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of
 borrowing
money
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.
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,
friend
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 and
money
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 are something that can'
t
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 be mixed up. A true
friendship
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 never known a "loan" word.
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