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It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship. Do you agree? Why or why not? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

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Many people say that borrowing
money
 from a
friend
 has negative effects to the
friendship
, but, in my opinion, it doesn'
t
. There are several minds that make me think so,
such
 as: true
friendship
, better relationship, and help each other. Borrowing
money
 from a
friend
 doesn'
t
 threat
friendship
 at all.
First
, when you have truly best friends who can lend you some
money
, they won'
t
 blame you even though if you can'
t
 return it. They will think that good friends are far more important than just
money
. You can find
money
 everywhere, but where you can find
such
 a good
friend
?
Second
, If someone
lend
Suggestion
lends
 his
money
 to his best
friend
, their relationship will be better; because, they will talk and figure out the problem together. When they are discussing the problem together, they can feel more closer, because the borrower will feel the same way as the borrowed person feel.
Lastly
, don'
t
 you realize that if you lend someone
money
, it means that you help him, even though if it is just a loan. You have done a pretty good job. He will see you in a better way. With your
money
, he can find the way out of his problem easier. In conclusion,
borrowing
disposing of money or property with the expectation that the same thing (or an equivalent) will be returned
lending
money
 to a
friend
 doesn'
t
 harm or jeopardize a
friendship
. There are lots of advantages
from
Suggestion
of
 borrowing
money
.
Furthermore
,
friend
 and
money
 are something that can'
t
 be mixed up. A true
friendship
 never known a "loan" word.
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