A lot of old people are suffering from loneliness these days. They also lack physical fitness. What do you think are the reasons for this problem? Can you think of possible solutions?

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In modern time, numbers of

aged

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aging

people suffering from loneliness and feel physically unfit, and

this

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is due to very small family background and children living abroad.

This

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could be solved by children stay with their old parents and

secondly

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Government could open more old

age

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house with advanced facilities. Nowadays, family structure is very limited, consisting only with three to four members. And

this

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home

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background creates many uncertainties for the parents themselves when they grow older. Now people are moving out of their country, leaving the aged once at

home

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. Some do take with

them but

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them, but

most of them do not want their mom and dad to be with them.

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, in

India at

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India, in

India in

Kerala, many houses are left with two old people or even homes are shut down and old parents are kept in the old

age

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home

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becoz

for the reason that; on account of

because

they can't take along with them due in family visa they are not included.

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this

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growing situation of loneliness and lack of

health fitness

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health, fitness

for

elderly

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the elderly

could be resolved by government help and support.

Union

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The union

can take responsibility to look after the aged people of the nation by opening more old

age

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houses and provide them with all advanced health related equipments. And

secondly

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, children who are moving from their native and getting settled outside the country could take with them and look after them with all

neccesities

the condition of being essential or indispensable

necessities

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, Indira

niketan

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Niketan

elderly house

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an elderly house

the elderly house

banglore

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Banglore

, is well furnished with all the required latest needs

for

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the people. They are looked after very well. They have timely gym and exercise, entertainment and there are assigned people to be with them at all times.I believe

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by doing

this

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can save the elderly feel loneliness and unfit. In conclusion, it's not fair to leave the aged parents alone in the house or separate them in their old

age

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. It's

also

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the responsibility of their children to look after and respect the aged parents. They make sure that elderly people feel at

home

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and are healthy till they are alive.

Its

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It's

also

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the duty of a union to ensure the health and well being of the aged public of the country.

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A lot of old people are suffering from loneliness these days. They also lack physical fitness. What do you think are the reasons for this problem? Can you think of possible solutions?

Your opinion

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