Some people encourage young people to travel and study.. Give some advantages and disadvantages...

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Nowadays,

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give out

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all-out

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of teenagers

travel

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travels

for studying abroad in high school or university. And most of parents encourage them. We all know that studying abroad would help them to build a

sucsessful

having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome

successful

carrer

a person who is responsible for attending to the needs of a child or dependent adult

carer

carrier

, but others are saying that studying abroad is not a correct choice because of many reasons.

First

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of all, the

first

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team is saying that we should encourage young people to study or even work abroad, because they will gain new

knoledge

the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning

knowledge

. To illustrate, many studies shows that most of the

celebrities travel

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celebrities, travel

a lot and they gain experiences that why we should encourage them.

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, young people or teenagers will build the future, so if we closed the

doors they

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doors, they

will not be able to build the new generations that why we should encourage them.

On the other hand

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, the

second

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team is saying that we should not encourage them for studying abroad. Our

country

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wants the teenagers effort more than the other countries. So why we encourage them to travel, while we can encourage them to rise our culture.

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, if teenagers travelled to study, they would forget

there

of them or themselves

their

traditions.

In particular

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, the

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country

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country's

history would be forgotten. Many studies show that 60% of the studying abroad students could not speak

there

of them or themselves

their

mother language clear like they were. By the way, we should encourage them to benefit

there

of them or themselves

their

country

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more. To sum up, young people or teenagers are the heart of the

country

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. They can build it or

distroy

do away with, cause the destruction or undoing of

destroy

destroyed

it.

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it is about

teenagers we

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teenagers, we

should think deeper that anytime.

This

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topic is double edged. And it will be better if we encourage teenagers to follow

there

of them or themselves

their

dreams.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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274 words

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